Wednesday, February 29, 2012

Response to Taylor Hardy's "Losing Sincerity"


            Taylor’s story portrays the main character, Brad, and his attempts to survive as a manager of a hotel.  He controls and directs a small staff of people and becomes fond of Alyson, a fellow employee.  After a wild sorority party in the hotel, the two decide to go out for drinks despite their previous one night stand.
            Some of the things that I really liked about the story was the use of dialogue.  It seemed very realistic for these characters to speak this way due to their young adulthood.  The short sentences and multiple curse words worked well.  As far as the plot goes, I had a hard time making sense of what was happening.  There seemed to be a lot of distractions from the initial story line, which is the relationship between Alyson and Brad.  I appreciated some of the later characters introduced, such as the Australian and the Californian.  I thought that they were going to add a new level of depth in the story, but instead they seemed to get in the way.  I felt this way about the entire party as well.  It may as well have never happened.  I kept on expecting at some point the two were going to settle their differences at the hotel.  But instead, we sift through a large amount of fluff to reach the conclusion where they get drinks together and everything is presumed to be just fine.
            The title also could have been a little stronger and more relevant to the story.  Who’s being sincere and losing it?  In all, I thought that the story and setting was very interesting.  There are a lot of ways for this story to pan out and be fantastic.  For now, I think that the author can work on cutting to the chase (which is definitely a problem I have).  I enjoyed the story.

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